Tuesday 17 October 2017
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Hello Amanda, my name is Lily I am a student in Te Waka Ako At Waikowhai Primary school. I really liked that you added lots of description and detail in this writing. It reminds me of when I wrote a persuasive writing. Maybe next time you could add a detail other then that it is great. If you would like to see some of my learning search up http://wpslilyw.blogspot.co.nz/.
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Hi Lily! It's Amanda from Edmund Hillary School, Room 2
DeleteI really really appreciate your advice you've given me and I'll make sure to add more detail to make it more great!
I will visit and observe your learning on your blog! :)
Kia Ora
ReplyDeleteMy name is Jaeda in Te Waka Ako from Waikowhai Primary School. I liked the way how you could think of the ways of what makes people lazy, it was also really fun reading the information. Could you think of adding more slides. You could add this in as well, If kids watch horror movies that are only for 13+ it could make them have bad dreams. If you would like to see my blog here's my adress http://wpsjaedaa.blogspot.co.nz/
Kia Ora Jaeda,
DeleteIt's Amanda here from Edmund Hillary School, Room 2.
I think I should add more slides (If I have the time) I don't usually get comments on my blog so sorry for replying to you this late. You gave me a great idea to talk about horror movies!
Thank you :D